Can I get some feedback

[Kyon]

I made this song tonight and I want to get some feedback on how it sounds.

 

http://soundcloud.com/zacalac/moon

[Epsilon]

It made me feel a bit tired at the beginning, but it started to get better around 1:00.

[Kyon]

Good, that was kinda the point.

[Epsilon]

Be glad I'm not sleep deprived (at least not as sleep deprived as I usually am ).

[Batman]

Feedback:

 

-The little intro portion seemed to drag just a tad.

-It was alittle bland, and didn't seem to escalate or anything.

 

Keep at it you got plenty of time to improve, I look forward to listening to more of your tracks in future.

[Ian]

What exactly were you aiming to present? Just so I know how to critique this.

[BTGBullseye]

Don't take this badly, but the sound to me was uninteresting... It didn't hold my attention, I was expecting exactly what came next, and it moved a bit too slow...

 

That's my take on it, but you do have a better start than most I've heard, and I definitely can't do better personally.

[Alyxx Thorne]

That's some funky shit!

 

I like the sound of it, and it feels relaxing, so I think this could be a nice idea to expand upon into a longer song.

[Kyon]

Yeah, I'm going to redo some stuff and extend it out a little longer.

 

Also, for the people who asked, it is supposed to be slow and relaxing.

[Brad]

I like it!

IMO it sounded like futuristic elevator music.

[Reaper Jack]

I found it to be a little... bland. You need more kick.